考研英語小作文批改投訴信5-7分例文2

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　5-7分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a buyer of your online store and I bought a mobile phone last week. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about some problems after I use it during a short period of time.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is that it is unconvenience to use it and I cannot stand it. In the first place, the buttery needs recharging after using mere four hours, and I must take my charger with me when I go out for a while. In addition, the buttom are too small that it is nearly difficult to type anything with them. Under these circumstances, I find it so hard to use it in my daily life.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could change my phone for another new one that works well, preferably receive a refund for it, and I would like to have this matter settled by you within a week.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a buyer of your online store and I bought a mobile phone last week. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about some problems after I use(改為using) it during a short period of time.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is that it is unconvenience (改為inconvenient)to use it and I cannot stand it. In the first place, the buttery needs recharging after using(加for) mere four hours, and I must take my charger with me when I go out for a while. In addition, the buttom(拼寫錯誤，導致我不清楚你要表達的意思) are too small that it is nearly difficult to type anything with them. Under these circumstances, I find it so hard to use it in my daily life.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could change my phone for another new one that works well, preferably receive a refund for it, and I would like to have this matter settled by you within a week.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　6分

　　同學你好，標點符號與后面的單詞要空一格。建議你寫完作文后再檢查一遍，如果僅僅是因為拼寫錯誤，造成老師對整篇作文的理解出現偏差，最終影響分數是得不償失的。

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　5-7分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a buyer of your online store and I bought a mobile phone last week. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about some problems after I use it during a short period of time.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is that it is unconvenience to use it and I cannot stand it. In the first place, the buttery needs recharging after using mere four hours, and I must take my charger with me when I go out for a while. In addition, the buttom are too small that it is nearly difficult to type anything with them. Under these circumstances, I find it so hard to use it in my daily life.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could change my phone for another new one that works well, preferably receive a refund for it, and I would like to have this matter settled by you within a week.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a buyer of your online store and I bought a mobile phone last week. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about some problems after I use(改為using) it during a short period of time.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is that it is unconvenience (改為inconvenient)to use it and I cannot stand it. In the first place, the buttery needs recharging after using(加for) mere four hours, and I must take my charger with me when I go out for a while. In addition, the buttom(拼寫錯誤，導致我不清楚你要表達的意思) are too small that it is nearly difficult to type anything with them. Under these circumstances, I find it so hard to use it in my daily life.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could change my phone for another new one that works well, preferably receive a refund for it, and I would like to have this matter settled by you within a week.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　6分

　　同學你好，標點符號與后面的單詞要空一格。建議你寫完作文后再檢查一遍，如果僅僅是因為拼寫錯誤，造成老師對整篇作文的理解出現偏差，最終影響分數是得不償失的。